1-2 Punch League: Kiki Spirez vs Spume Corrupt (WEEK 5) |
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 Topic: Kiki Spirez vs Spume Corrupt (WEEK 5)Posted: 28 September 2016 at 1:09am |
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DUE THURSDAY MIDNIGHT
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#bananas
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Kiki Spirez
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Posted: 29 September 2016 at 10:30am |
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Show me some love? I aint playin' ball - So you can stop posing you fuck, *Big Sam is Sam Allardyce - England football manager. He quit this week due to a newspaper videoing him being involved in corruption.
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 29 September 2016 at 11:28pm |
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Who bout the fly shit?
When I spit he gone get fucked up and lose, ruffed up an bruised like when he tagged with bro goose Same dude I made champ and improved , so kik knows the truth he gets a belt when I say he couldn't stand in my shoes |
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 1:02am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Kick, aight, nice short bar that got to the point quick, decent nameplay, setup was good, punch worked tho a bit entangled concept. Spume, aggressive flow, nice personal touch with setup and punch, overall I liked tho it was rather lengthy. Another even clash, tho I give it to spume for having a more straightforward attack, could go either way tho.
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 2:02am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Kiks had a nice decent punch, good set up, nice flow. Decent nameplay. Spruce I think you tried to fit too much in and it affected the bar. Good flow and rhymes,the punch could've hit harder. As con said it was long. That had enough to be 4 lines Mvgt kiks |
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 4:18am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. kiki, not to bad, but not a haymaker. not someone who im familiar with, so thanks for expo. spume, nice job man, you came hard and aggressive here with nice mutlis strung thru. nice job on the set up with mutlis, and the punch was nice as well. mfvgt Spume, better all around bar.
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 5:04am |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. ok kiki: i know that the format here have people giving expos...but if the bar requires it to stand...it doesn't work for me. thankfully the surface meaning was sufficient as a shot. Spume: bit of a sprawling verse again...despite this you managed to frame your punch in a manner that i felt worked. v. Spume |
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 11:29pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. kiki- I thought you could'e executed this a lil harsher, but good use of current events and you tied it in to give that personal feel. spume - This was a lil long for me personally. I liked story/personal aspect but as a punch the length made the impact peter out somewhat. vote kiki
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Posted: 02 October 2016 at 11:30pm |
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This vote has been accepted by a moderator. Kiki. I am in 2 minds about this one. I liked the angle, and as a fellow Brit I am well aware of Mr Allardyce and should be able to get it without the expo ... but I'm not sure if I ever would. Cos you call him Big Sam in the expo, (which he IS known as), and pass it off as if that's what you said in the bar. But you didn't, you said Big S, (which he IS'NT known as ... correct me and if I'm wrong but even so it still means the expo doesn't match up). That's just a bit cheeky IMO and a bit of a reach. That said, was well structured and well rhymed. Nice to pick a topical news angle and apply to your opponent but as I have said, could have been worded much better. Spume: I like what you wrote. Just which you had trimmed it down to one bar ... cos it was hellastretched, But taking that into a account, the content was decent. Good personal angle, flowed well and nice with the multies. (Though it's easy to pack in the multies when you're writing a paragraph) Fairly even here again. My decision on this comes down to, whether I let the line length issue affect my voting ... I decide no. There's no official limit, and until there is I vote for the one that reads best. MFVGT Spoon |
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