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    Posted: 28 April 2016 at 3:43am

Merchant of War




It’s effortless, it’s bliss. As if I’m destined for benevolence

A sep-arate perspective to those sectioned off in deaths abyss

Thats the legend of the Devil, had his bid on Heaven’s cliffs

But an edge exists an inch beyond the presence of a precipice

Venomous. 

Sit plotting your demise and I’m an artisan of violence

Any king that comes and conquers has an army of survivors

It’s a tale as old as time, supplying armaments to clients

Give the frail and heartless fight. The final farce with fake disguises

So,

The palms will be my pilot in reaction to the pain it brings

It’s ominous in silence like the flapping of a raven's wing

Will the rank of king grace me with conscious minded catharsis?

Or will the weight it brings break me to fossils lining the carcass…?

I spawned a light bright like my jobs defying the darkness

But then I lost the sight of whats wrong and right in the process

Might have to columbine compassion to pry out my cards with

Unhatch a plan of action for all defying my margin

Maybe manufacture evidence and falsify the charges

It’s enough to mulch the mind like the multiplying of markets

Saw a tyrant and martian in the mirror because my cores a mess

More or less an orchestrator coordinating the cords of death

A portrait penned with swords of men with forms at rest

Extending an appendage just to gore your chest, leave you

With more thorns compressed than a hornets nest

Then collect the enormous debt from wars investment

It’s a horrid, senseless wealth involvement

I’d sell it all, spend it all on health and knowledge

But I’m dwelling on it and hell is calling, cause

I’m a helpless pawn to my self-indulgence
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Well, this sucks. Nigma joined.

Don't forget to add the quote!

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It’s effortless, it’s bliss. As if I’m destined for benevolence

A sep-arate perspective to those sectioned off in deaths abyss

Thats the legend of the Devil, had his bid on Heaven’s cliffs

But an edge exists an inch beyond the presence of a precipice


It's effortless indeed. The way these words come out in one big fluid Bruce Lee Dragon Tail Kick... Amazing. The second bar is absolutely insane. Being that descriptive in such a few words, damn.


Quote Venomous. 

Sit plotting your demise and I’m an artisan of violence

Any king that comes and conquers has an army of survivors

It’s a tale as old as time, supplying armaments to clients

Give the frail and heartless fight. The final farce with fake disguises


That last line, though.



Quote So,

The palms will be my pilot in reaction to the pain it brings

It’s ominous in silence like the flapping of a raven's wing

Will the rank of king grace me with conscious minded catharsis?

Or will the weight it brings break me to fossils lining the carcass…?

I spawned a light bright like my jobs defying the darkness

But then I lost the sight of whats wrong and right in the process

Might have to columbine compassion to pry out my cards with

Unhatch a plan of action for all defying my margin

Maybe manufacture evidence and falsify the charges

It’s enough to mulch the mind like the multiplying of markets

Saw a tyrant and martian in the mirror because my cores a mess

More or less an orchestrator coordinating the cords of death

A portrait penned with swords of men with forms at rest

Extending an appendage just to gore your chest, leave you

With more thorns compressed than a hornets nest

Then collect the enormous debt from wars investment

It’s a horrid, senseless wealth involvement

I’d sell it all, spend it all on health and knowledge

But I’m dwelling on it and hell is calling, cause

I’m a helpless pawn to my self-indulgence

I mean, I wanted to break this up but the flow was so good that it'd be a crime to separate this in several segments. The entire verse gave me that God of War movie feeling and I loved that movie.

Overall: This is good. Done.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote alicewonder Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 May 2016 at 7:12pm
Just saw this. I'll leave some proper feedback later, but I'm glad to see you participating. As it stands, it's undoubtedly some fascinating work. 
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1 up.

I promise I'll start feeding soon
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Ha! That Ravens wing line was 🔥! The whole concept of assisting war and death yet struggling softly with the idea that you may be the centerpiece for destruction was raw as fuck. You an oddworldly alien bro ha ha. This was dope

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This is so dope bro!! Nigma you are a lyrical artist and constructed this to the up most of my expectations you truly have grown and the technique you used is flawless... i have to  concur with Q that raven line was..... YIKES!!! 
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote alicewonder Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 24 May 2016 at 10:06pm
Meant to feed this a while ago, my bad! 
Almost everything's been mentioned already, but I think the impeccable schemes and switch ups you employed here can't be stressed enough. Content-wise, it was also a quite original approach and I thoroughly enjoyed the depiction of the "edge" being a fine line between (self-) destruction and the "benevolence", which you emphasised as your destiny. Your ending couplet was another highlight, along with the already mentioned raven line, both content and scheme-wise, as you're concluding it by having already "crossed" that very line towards depravity. Expertly conveyed. 
Overall, a very enjoyable read! 
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