Topic ClosedElevation Centre: Manc or The Law, how bad can my bars get?

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    Posted: 06 March 2015 at 10:11pm
Just randoms, freestyling is best way to learn i guess

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#Hope they will help a nigga out, toodles.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 9:29am
Tbh - You can pm any guy that verse from whom you seek some feedback, Also imo Freestyling ain't the best way to elevate, I mean if you are working on flow stuff, then writing OMs is cool and If you are working on punchlines and aggression, then writing some diss stuff would be great ! (you can always send those disses or OMs to guys for feedback)

Looking forward to a rematch when we both elevate. 

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 9:57am
1st we ain't gonna rematch, 2nd you're not welcome in this thread, and 3rd feed not appreciated.

I said Manc or The Law.

"Call Outs"...is the best place to ask for rematch not here.
And i'm not an amateur like you. You're the one who needs elevation comparing me and you. We not at the same level.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:03am
Originally posted by Slap Banger Slap Banger wrote:

1st we ain't gonna rematch, 2nd you're not welcome in this thread, and 3rd feed not appreciated.

I said Manc or The Law.

"Call Outs"...is the best place to ask for rematch not here.
And i'm not an amateur like you. You're the one who needs elevation comparing me and you. We not at the same level.

1st I tried to help , 2nd That was supposed to be peaceful and I wasn't asking for rematch and 3rd - No hard feelings cuz you lost to me, so how are you better? 

Lol,
Anyway while you were not active here Law made Elevation Help Center to help guys like ya, you might wanna check that out !
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:15am
If you won against me then why come here and ask for rematch? You know deep down whooped your butt!.

Now off my sight!.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:17am
Well to me you both need to elevate... And snake doesnt rhyme with verse.. Work on rhyming... I too got to improve man... Hope one day we'l do a collab together when we've both polished ou' shit.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:29am
Originally posted by Slap Banger Slap Banger wrote:

1st we ain't gonna rematch, 2nd you're not welcome in this thread, and 3rd feed not appreciated.

I said Manc or The Law.

"Call Outs"...is the best place to ask for rematch not here.
And i'm not an amateur like you. You're the one who needs elevation comparing me and you. We not at the same level.

Vets don't take too kind to this kind of faggotry nor do I and law certainly won't. This freestyle was garbage real talk so don't be calling anyone an amateur. You want to be helped? Than don't be a dick and we won't be either.

Rule #1 accept criticism and try to improve off of it. No matter what everyone is going to have an opinion whether you agree with it or not.   
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:34am
Axyrocker and Slap Banger if you continue to bitch with each other then I will have to lock the thread. If your serious about improving then surely any feedback you can get is helpful, right?
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:34am
Ricaul i saw your battle with Axy, you're worse!.

BarryBonds don't pour out your frustrations of getting dissed by Mission all on me. You can go type a retaliation to Mission. I never dissed you.

And BarryBonds you're not a vet anyway or good at rap.

I'm texting towards Axy, it's between me and him.
So where does Ricaul and BarryBonds fit in???

I'm not here to beef you two attention seekers.

I said Law or Manc. I think i was specific.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:37am
Shankley that will be helpful. You can close this thread for peace sake. I'm already pissed.
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:39am
I will renegade you on any track at any time. You aren't even worth my time moose. Also Manc has been in active... haha you say I suck? Kid I can write better bars than you off the top of my dome. I'm trying to help you to be honest, but it seems you don't want help. I could name many things wrong with that verse. 

What's with all these bitches posting pictures of wine on Instagram
I'll go ham, slaughter you like Mary hadn't a little lamb
N ask me if I give a damn as I spread your legs like jam
I'll bust one out like I just hit a "grand slam"

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:39am
Originally posted by Shankley Shankley wrote:

Axyrocker and Slap Banger if you continue to bitch with each other then I will have to lock the thread. If your serious about improving then surely any feedback you can get is helpful, right?

You don't need to really close this, I ain't bitchin. If this guy really needs help, he deserves it ! I will keep myself out of this. Sorry for the trouble caused 

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 March 2015 at 10:42am
Post it in the Open Mic Section you'll get a lot more feed on it, and give it a title instead of what you have got.

Enough with the bullshit....

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