Text Battle Archive: mcwoods vs sparta (topical title)

my jaw dropped to the floor, when I first saw her face
at the start, showed no heart, but it was all for the chase
we got the talking about life, the stuff that made her smile
now known her for a year, still only feels like a while
we stay up chatting all night, not looking forward to the end
not just another girl now, now she�s become more than a friend
 confused cause id die to be with her, and not was killing me
told her, she�d always have a shoulder to cry on if she�s feeling weak
I wanted to really see, if she felt the same as I did
asked her out like a clown, looking down like a shy kid
but she decided, to give this mere mortal a shot this week
so we�re talking about times, places, and a spot to meet
�hey, next week�s your birthday�, let�s leave it till then
 �We can have a great night, and maybe a special end�..�  16

mix it up�..

so around comes the day and in some ways its frightening
what if I screw I up, by not saying the right thing?
as we take our seat, im feeling weak as I look across my plate
what would be a friendly silence, is an awkward pause on a date
but the mood soon chills n� her dress has made my thoughts go berserk
no help when she winks to me n� tells the waiter �no desert�
 �ive got to make a quick call hun, but order a bottle of wine
it�s early, its only so nine, so we can head back to mine�
perverted thoughts arouse, �special end� and now here home
quick car ride and short walk, finally in her house all alone
�ill go into the main room, you stay out here till I say so�
strip naked quick, hear the words, so im ready to go
walk in the room, cant believe my eyes��
all my friends and friends looking shocked n� yelling �SURPRISE�!!!!!!!��� damn�.

classy

right, here it is...props to woods for spotting i got liquids name wrong, lol


Seven-thirty PM, and Liquid's gettin' prepared
He's got the CK on the face and the gel in the hair
He says he ain't scared, but he knows he's got to be ready
If he's finally gonna get around to poppin' his cherry
And as he drops on the bed he starts thinkin' ahead
Of how he'll have the date progressin' from a drink to his bed
Wonderin' if sex'll be somethin' like what he's seen in his pornos
But he ain't wanna try nothin' forceful or he'll leave with a sore nose
An' after a quick check with his mum of when he's vowed to be home,
He goes stridin' out the door in a cloud of cologne...

And so the boy's on his way, steppin' off of the train
On his way to the bar where he'll be droppin' his game
His head's rushing around in the still of the night
Worryin' bout keeping his cool, and not spilling his pint
And so he enters, glances up, and completely loses his breath
His girl is standing by the wall, and her beauty's like death
A dress improving her breasts, my God she can't have been human
And so he thinks, this ain't the sort of chance to be losing
He takes a breath, approaches with his heart in his throat
And as he begins to work on her, LiQuiD's starting to hope
She laughs at his jokes, and listens flashing a smile
Poor Nick certainly ain't been smitten like that for a while
The night draws in, all is well, and this young pup's on the brink
He leans in and murmurs...does she want to come up for a drink?
With a smile, she agrees...he sees the lust in her gaze
And before the door's even closed, her tongue is thrust in his face...

...The boy wakes up, looks around, and feels the duke of the world
Nothing can bring him down now, nothing he wouldn't do for his girl
But he looks to his side, and sees her, looking as though she's sad
As she looks at the picture of his parents...'Nick, how the hell do you know my Dad?'

Woods - Wow, Mismatched Syllables In Multi's Are Like The Most Annoying Things Ever, But I Wont Let That Effect My Vote Seein As It's Topical Lol. This Was A Great Story, Well Planned Out An Everything You Said Was Relevant. Ending Was Dope Haha. You Shoulda Had Another Bar After That Tho, To Explain What He Was Feeling, But Ye, Good Verse.
Spart - Your Verse Was Hot Also. This Was A Good Story Too. I Liked The Description In The First Paragraph About Him Getting Ready Etc.I Didn't See The Ending Coming, About Her Being His Sister Lol.

This Is An Extremely Hard Choice. Both Had Smooth Stories With An Unpredictable Ending. However, I Think I'm Gonna Have To Go With Woods, Simply Because I Thought His Was More Believable, Whereas Sparta's Was Kinda,I Unno, It Just Wouldn't Happen. This Was Alot Closer Than I've Probably Made It Seem, But Ye

Woods GMV

thanks for the votes, any more?

if thats cool with everybody???

cool, thanks, good battle

forever , will do