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Monolith
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Topic: Monolith vs Ace TexTPosted: 14 July 2008 at 8:48am |
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House rules
Sound good?
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 11:53am |
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u first
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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Monolith
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 3:17pm |
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Iight I'll put my shit up in a moment.
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 4:06pm |
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FUCK, ILL GO
I hear empty guns, cuz when arsenal speak I hear empty threats/
No pimp in his game, ugly fuck gotta pay for sex, no thug in his veins, this pussy hang wit empty sets/ Bla Bla Bla and what you say you'll do to me/ but in reality bitch your like broken guns...you'll never shoot at me/ Speakin all that tomfoolery, nothing real about you, ya fake as ya jewelry/ Actin like you schoolin me, but you as dumb as dumb could be/ I got college degrees/ bet you can't even spell G.E.D/ I am tha king of this shit and it's the crown I 'm holdin/ Yous a feeble bitch I'll leave ya whole body swollen/ Another internet gangsta, all ya stripes an street cred is made up or stolen/ Put the sweeper to ya ass,blow out ya shit and clean out your colon/ Check my name, I'm real dogg, I don't fuck around!/ You can check my glock too, he'll get deep in ya skin like an ultra-sound/ C-mon arsenal, calm it down!/ Cuz you gettin gangsta is about as funny as a circus clown/ I'll say again like I said it before/ you're about as authentic of a rapper as a mexican runnin an american store/ I'll fuckin bury this whore, I'm Ace TexT cuzo, the mayor of gore!!/ Do worse shit to you than what you seen on Saw 2,3 and four/ Rusted saw blades,needles and thread and an alcohol bath/ Cut off your feet and force your ass to walk a straight path/ Blood transfusions to make sure your sufferin last!/ Carve off ya face an inch at a time/ wanted to cut up his back-bone but I couldn't find this cowards spine!/ |
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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Monolith
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 4:13pm |
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I'll obliterate ya every flow before it's formed against me
You haven't got a chance in hell, Ace the fake ass TexT'cee
Elevate above your ass an piss on clouds you can't reach
I'm on the otha side of some otha shit that you can't teach
Don't think to hard or you might form a breach in your cranium
An superman could come to aide your lines, but he aint saven'em
You must of lost ya flow check the lost an never found
You could stand ready to spit all day, mouth hangin open but not a sound
You aint even gotta dig ya gave, you was born 6 feet undaground
But go ahead try an spit, the silence heard will be profound
I peeped your flow before, it was shitty text
So right now I'm just lookin forward to who evers next
An I've seen the future, your flow will never be tight
Just like ya ass wont be, fuckin transvestite
When this battle started, it was already finished
An now any game you did have, is diminished |
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Monolith
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 4:14pm |
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fuck yo can someone delete my verse my comp had froze up went i went to post it earlier an he put his shit up so i was wondering if someone could delete this verse of mine or we can just keep it doesn't matter to me. anyways yeah.
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Monolith
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 4:16pm |
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nvm my lost post just keep the one i had.
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 4:36pm |
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VOTE
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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bad karma
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 6:15pm |
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allllllrighty then ACE - ya opener shoulda been cut down inta 2 bars me thinks, but anyways.....nice spit man there was sum kool punch's in there multies were aight ya only problem was there wernt nutin personal in there that i saw. there was a few punchs in there i did like, of ma head the G.E.D bit, the broken guns bit etc...
MONOLITH - you deffinatly getin better dude nice opener wit the ace textcee bit deffinatly shows improvement there mayn, but i dont think yo punches came down as hard as ace's. keep it up tho coz you gettin better each battle....
MVGT ACE.TEXT
1~0
Peace....\0/
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stuck here wit a damaged back,
how tha fuck i manage that? its savage that woz a hit n run, this shit aint fun almost chipped me bum :( |
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bad karma
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 6:16pm |
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oh yeah n jus qui
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stuck here wit a damaged back,
how tha fuck i manage that? its savage that woz a hit n run, this shit aint fun almost chipped me bum :( |
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hanGing
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 6:21pm |
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As do i - but shrink it.
Too big. |
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Monolith
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 7:14pm |
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Thanks, yeah I been meaning to shrink it an like i tried about idk an hour ago I think but it never shrank idk. Shit's being retarded I'll prolly have to make the pic all over again lol.
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Monolith
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Posted: 15 July 2008 at 12:20pm |
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UPPIN FOR VOTES
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Senor Perfecto
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Posted: 15 July 2008 at 5:01pm |
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Ace Text... you went over the sixteen line limit and had an odd three-line rhyme before your closing bar... Some lines were too long... others were too short... therefore the flow was choppy... A lot of guns and gangsta-talk and I do not understand the two arsenal references... There were some decent punches... but also too much filler... Wordplay was simple or played... Keep to the rules... edit out the filler... and use hard-hitting punches like the last line...
Monolith... a shorter verse... therefore less filler... but also fewer decent punches... Little evidence of wordplay or other elements... Vote: Monolith... Adios... ![]() |
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 16 July 2008 at 2:47pm |
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UPPIN 4 VOTES!
1-1
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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Posted: 18 July 2008 at 8:10pm |
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Text- I think your flow was kind of chopy at parts coz one line was long and then the next short. Also the rules said 16 lines and you went over that.. But you did have some ok punches..
Monolith- Flow was better coz the lines were not so far off from each other. But you only had a few ok puches..
MVGT - Monolith coz he kepted to the rules..
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DressToKill
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Posted: 18 July 2008 at 8:28pm |
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Ace - Very generic verse..talking about guns in a battle is no way to attack your opponent and this lead to very little or no punches towards Monolith..There were some good multies in there and if you could incorperate them into a punch then your battle verses would be alot more effective..
Monilith - No real punchlines at all..you showed good structure and flow that was aided by some multies but again this is a battle..you need punchlines and agressiveness to win..your verse did not show these qualities and therefore in my opinion lost you the battle
Vote : Ace Text
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The original comeback kid
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 23 July 2008 at 9:20pm |
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uppIN 4 VOTES GET DIS OVA WITH
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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Posted: 24 July 2008 at 1:11am |
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This battle was terrible....
Ace Text: Very different style of verse than alot of your other verses....very basic and lackin in punches...it seems you dont know what a punchline is or even wordplay...yet in your other battles ive seen, you have a totally different style...very sketchy IMO....anyways this verse was very noobish...lots of filler and no real hard hitting punchlines...hit up a tutorial Monolith: Pretty poor verse...you seem to suffer from the same problems as Ace...very basic verse with weak punches...try incorporating personals and wordplay to your verses... Vote: Ace for the less wack verse |
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Ace TexT
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Posted: 25 July 2008 at 12:20pm |
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3-2
my way
uppin
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Out To Be Number One,Ace,Uno
In LA This Is The Beginning FOR NoSy MuthAfuCkas Im 16 StIlL KiLlIn EM' SoFtLy/ YoUnGesT DoIn It, U KaNt CoMpaRe Me 2 PoInT BlAnK AT ALL B!/ |
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