Audio Mic: Never Knew You (Ill Mind of Hopsin 6 remix)

 

Thinking back to when I first met you.. you was tight as shit
Had my sister wrapped around you, fought for her with righteousness
You was even into rappin', makin' beats n writin shit
Gave me even more inspiration to grip a mic n pen
Always wished that one day we could hit a studio
Cuz you would hit my facebook askin "how's the spittin doin, bro?"
Now I see you in a different light, you fit with different folk
and all the shit you did to my family is fuckin' pitiful..
You fuckin waste of life, you see all ya decisions cost you
The same pen you see your homies in's the one your sendin off to
Lookin like Timmy's a bad motherfucker but really he knows that he's hopeless n lost
Strappin a belt to his muscle n stickin a needles his method to cope with it all
I hate you.. your presence is the reason why my sisters hooked
And when you got her on the shit, your punkish ass was quick to book
And now I see you in a different image than the one you painted
But I done torn that off the wall to fuckin bust the frame in

And I guess maybe I never knew you..
Cuz the way things are, penitentiaries ya only move dude
(Ya on the road man, ya on the road)
I could never chill n kick back n talk to you like I use to
(Your so lost)
And now I realize my top dog aint real, man he used you..
N now your gone

See my brother had suspicions when you came around
I always brushed it off because our bond's too strong to break it down
But now you really open up and show the way you truly are
The needle tracks are gone, but now my sisters left with wounds n scars
It tears me... to think that my mother gave you the Christmas
That you never fuckin' had, and in return you give us this shit
We brought you in our fuckin' home, made you our own
And when it came to the 25th, Mom had paid for a phone
But New Years 2015, another overdose
Wish it was the moment that your sorry ass had frozen hope
But every single time you bout to slip you seem to hold the rope
And once you bounce the hospital, your first thoughts to go home n smoke
Your time is now to pay your dues, everything God gave to you
You wasted, my hatred is greater, no way I can fake the truth..
You take risks, and those risks done took lives
Marty in the grave with a son above him n cant provide..

Maybe we all have demons, man I've faced the fact
But man you done some wicked shit that you just cant take back
2 people are dead because you dealt em poison
One with a newborn, and you are not a slight remorseful
You used to beat my sisters ass n feed her heroin
But long as you got your money, you'd continue your carelessness
I.. hate the fact you tricked us all, n I fell for it too
All the evil shit you done in life that's compelling to you
Done had you back up where you belong, inside of a prison cell
Man, words around that there's a place in hell just for you
And it brings a smile upon my face to tell you the truth
That my sisters clean and pregnant, doing well without you
But man, it's hard to forget all the things you burned in our minds
But we're taking our steps as family and learn that with time
Anything that we done been through's only worse if we cry
That's why we standin up stronger and united, we're combined
Man..

 

Ill start with my negatives - Your little hooks are terrible lol. No hate just cant fuck with them. They are pitiful and they ruin it for me.

 

Positive - The is lyrically beautiful. Really really deep and I know exactly what you were spitting in this piece. This is what happens when you write and rap about real shit and you just being you instead of trying to find a place. Be yourself. This was really good and your flow didn't come off terribly robotic. Good work here

For the love of God keep working. You have rare talent and to find it at your age, you are going to do a lot with it. Keep writing and keep spitting. It's all getting better.

 

Do what you did here. I can tell this shit just came together naturally. That's why it came off so good man. Don't fucking force anything.

I particularly enjoyed the first stanza with the continuing image metaphor, and the authenticity which was visible between the lines. I wasn't really feeling the hook, but you already pointed out that it was just there for the sake of it. So from a lyrical standpoint, this was really nice!