Open Mic: [OM King] time traveling hunk

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   Behold! I have come back in time
Come from the future to lead all the blind!
Hark unto me mere pesants and witness
Brung science from the future, so listen up bitchesss! 

Das right I'm a thug with a time machine son
Sling my Gat out the window shooting dinos for fun
Loosing knowledge on dipshits on this fucking run

So here is the shit I got sent to tell you
K west is prez in twenty twenty two
Mother fucker burned bridges with Belize an Guam 
I know that's fucked up but let me go on

You see they got sugar 
Which now we don't got
An a whole fucking war started up from a shot
Starbucks was running the whole fucking states
An coffee is shit without them little white flakes

Oh wait more important!
Listen to this
They cloned a Mamoth from one of thier shits
Now if that's not fucked up
I don't know what is

But Something important I was sent here to teach?
Supposed to move you with my gift of the speech 
Built me a time machine so I could preach..
But I forgot it.. ain't life a beach?

Something about some guy named trump?
Maybe I shouldnt of gotten this drunk?
All I wants bitches with junk in da trunk
Cause bitches they love a time traveling hunk

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Gnarly Teef Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 30 January 2016 Location: your mommas Status: Offline Points: 85	Post Options Post Reply Quote Gnarly Teef Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: [OM King] time traveling hunk Posted: 15 February 2016 at 9:33pm
	Behold! I have come back in time Come from the future to lead all the blind! Hark unto me mere pesants and witness Brung science from the future, so listen up bitchesss! Das right I'm a thug with a time machine son Sling my Gat out the window shooting dinos for fun Loosing knowledge on dipshits on this fucking run So here is the shit I got sent to tell you K west is prez in twenty twenty two Mother fucker burned bridges with Belize an Guam I know that's fucked up but let me go on You see they got sugar Which now we don't got An a whole fucking war started up from a shot Starbucks was running the whole fucking states An coffee is shit without them little white flakes Oh wait more important! Listen to this They cloned a Mamoth from one of thier shits Now if that's not fucked up I don't know what is But Something important I was sent here to teach? Supposed to move you with my gift of the speech Built me a time machine so I could preach.. But I forgot it.. ain't life a beach? Something about some guy named trump? Maybe I shouldnt of gotten this drunk? All I wants bitches with junk in da trunk Cause bitches they love a time traveling hunk

Concrete Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1424 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Concrete Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 17 February 2016 at 7:54am
	Well, even tho this more on the simplistic side it was an entertaining read nonetheless. Straight enough storytelling, I liked the shortage of sugar plot, was kinda original twist. Should have actually tried to make a proper story based on that, woulda been interesting. You coulda polished the barss, rhymes, etc, but I liked this for what it is. You could try to utilise your narrative skills in a bigger and more connected story next time, good luck.