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CHAIN 
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 Topic: Out of Your DepthPosted: 02 March 2015 at 10:36pm |
 Orchestrating conflict, I’m consciously perceiving it Constantly conniving…a condescending hedonist. Connoisseur of conmen in contrast with the real Contract with the one who won’t contradict the evilness. Me, I come in contact with the convicts on the concrete Foreign to the concept of calming down to breathe a bit. Dealing with the demons and the consequence of devious… Monetary monsters tryna conquer shit through leadership. Convos filled with surface level content, it’s for egotists The jewels dropped are taken out of context fo’ they even hit. I am not a deity…my condo ain’t where Eden is I do not speak on shit, I concentrate and plea the 5th. The name of the code of my conduct is ‘don’t even trip’ Enslaved, by these social constructs that don’t seem legit. Addicted to things that stay conjuring your weaknesses It’s foul and it’s darker than a congressman’s allegiances. To you, this is bull, my consonants are meaningless You never realized that those concubines ain’t phoenixes. Please, they are condors, concords how they’re speeding… I’m seeing through their consoles, they’re consummation geniuses. At concerts, they congregate with condoms, that’s an easy hit Might tell ‘em “outline the contour of my penis, bitch” I’m on a higher level trying to confiscate Prometheus Engineer state of mind from Congo to Belize I spit… Testaments for convoys of real McCoy’s, anointed ones Tryna spread the word so these continents can read my script. Body! HG |
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Smoothtung
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Posted: 02 March 2015 at 11:23pm |
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goddamn. dont even trip lol this is on some tip top
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Zachary
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 6:36am |
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"The name of the code of my conduct is ‘don’t even trip’
Enslaved, by these social constructs that don’t seem legit. Addicted to things that stay conjuring your weaknesses It’s foul and it’s darker than a congressman’s allegiances." So dope man! The entire piece is on point, I really dig the topic and you killed it with the flow and alliteration. |
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In this dense urban jungle of great disorder/
Cd players, turntables and tape recorders/ Become the tools that I use to erase the borders/ Between me and this secret ancient order/-Last Emperor |
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Shankley
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 12:16pm |
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This was dope man, real nice flow and your alliteration is next level. The picture was good but the verse was better. You killed it here CHAIN, nice going. Your word choice is what I feel sets your drops apart from most. Your always have top drawer flow mixed with excellent vocab. Excellent verse man really good read, and it was enjoyable which is always important.
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Geeza
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 1:25pm |
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Fucking hell man, got enough C-words? lol Nah for reals, nice alliteration bro that some fire right there. I think Shankley hit the nail on the head, your vocabulary is non human man! Walking thesaurus? Love this track though, my favorite bars are these:
"Me, I come in contact with the convicts on the concrete Foreign to the concept of calming down to breathe a bit. Dealing with the demons and the consequence of devious… Monetary monsters tryna conquer shit through leadership." "To you, this is bull, my consonants are meaningless You never realized that those concubines ain’t phoenixes." Sick shit! Peace |
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Jay Homicide
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 4:41pm |
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Ye ye, you alright.
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Ransom
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 7:24pm |
Best bar in the whole shit!.. pretty dope verse man, I had to decode all your bars though so don't let that shit happen again brauh, and whats up with the white angel? couldn't find no black ones.. smh I knew you was a sell out.. Lmao fucking with you homie... nice drop, tons of multis mixed with a little babble... Ill give you a 8 |
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dalinquent
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Posted: 03 March 2015 at 9:45pm |
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This was a good read... flow was tight throughout, the content was consistent as well... the alliteration were done in a manner than didn't seem excessive which is saying alot. I particularly was fond of the rolling flow tho, it's not a technique that many use and u did so near flawlessly... props
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nomedic
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Posted: 04 March 2015 at 5:18am |
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I liked the word play here the alliteration was top notch the flow was as smooth as butter homie the schemes were superb man I felt every line here and all lines were quality you have your own way of going through with a topic mad respect
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 04 March 2015 at 3:01pm |
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..Hands down my favorite writer on the site. You are a straight beast on everything you bless. The alliteration on this was bananas. It wasn't like an "alphabetical slaughter" jawn but it had a similar, more polished effect. You maintained that relentless flow & delivery in this as well. Which really makes your rhymes stand out. How it alternated with that "real" bar then just went consistently through that multi was really tough. Tough writing & tough content. It really was watching a master at work. Quick question though, could you spit it? I want to hear it how you meant it to be heard, not the little versions we always give it as readers. This was top notch bro, I really have nothing else to comment. kudos
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CHAIN
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Posted: 04 March 2015 at 7:26pm |
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Appreciate the feed dudes & gents.
@ransom lol @jay yeh I know. @ill yes, I can spit it. I always write to a beat. This is the beat I wrote this to. Its slow tempo makes it easy to ride. It's also a part of the reason the lines are so long. |
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iLL ScriptureZ
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Posted: 04 March 2015 at 11:23pm |
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...that beat doe
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 05 March 2015 at 5:54pm |
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ehhh this was ok...
lol just playin' you know what it is already. So many times I have read your work and so many times it is hard for me to find a flaw in it. This is no different. You have a way of making the reader think and actually make the reader have to go back and re read it 2 or 3 times to grasp the words you have written. I love drops that make you sit back and go damn. Did he just write that. lol I read this once sat back took a few bong rips and checked it out again. The intense rhyming and fluid flow has always been on another level. You just keep setting the bar higher and it always makes me want to do better myself. great work
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Posted: 06 March 2015 at 9:52pm |
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woah man best OM i've seen on this site yet
flow and multis were great. you have a very good vocabulary, makes it sound so classy. i loved this. |
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MVC Kid KO
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Posted: 06 March 2015 at 10:42pm |
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Damn, this I one of the dopest pieces I've seen in a while. The Ghost Face beat definitely added more impact to the flow and use of multis. I find it amazing how you're able to compose a piece with a huge amount of alliterations and still get your point across. From what I've seen, most other consonant heavy verses involve meaningless shit like "devastating demons when I decimate defenses dedicated to detonate as demonstrations deepen."
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Cuba
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Posted: 08 March 2015 at 12:28am |
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That shit was straight El Niño
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