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    Posted: 08 February 2008 at 12:01pm
Well, basically me and chain made this over msn. First line was mine, second was his etc. But sometimes I had 2 lines, then he had 2, or i had 3 and he had 1 or w/e, but overall we both contributed the same amount of lines.Some were just a joke, but majority of them we put alot of effort into. So ye, forget who wrote what, just read + feed bizznitches Clap

we the tightest there is, no1 even bothers to question
we mastered all the elements, the art of perfection
picked up so many skulls that we could start a collection
hang 'em off our necks, our erotic possesions
an all this type of shit is not regarding a weapon
no ice picks or clips, just smarts and agression
this is how real men do it, our ruggedness is pure
magnificent and brilliant and our substance is obscure
punch dudes in their stomach 'til their guts are on the floor
while ciphering with titans. and their blood is on our jaws
took bolts from frankenstien's neck an we stuck em on the door
thoughts so onorthodox the public will adore
covering the new grounds they reluctant to explore
the content is incredible, it's stuff you can't ignore
we'll show you what to do if any fuckers wanna war!!

Rhyming is strategic...
an if you want to match our flow, the timin is they key and..
technically precise, you're blinded till u see it 
just sit and take a look at every guy that tried to beat it
the minds of the prestigious, we fried 'em with our weak shit   
they're frightend and their hidin, suprised em with our speeches
analizing wanksters crying...tranqualizers needed 
known around here coz our alibi's succeeded
hailed as the new kings, just televise our deepness 
you'll never find a weakness, our defence is impeccible
the tactics are superior, you're fencing with generals
noticed by the God's, our rep is incredible
quoted by the masses, but they never respected you
we find it very hysterical...
so if u wanna fuck with us then we'll step on ya testicles (nh)
and divine intervention couldn't edit the spectacle!!

an impossible event, we phenominal with strength
we're dominant as rappers and unstoppable as men
ignorin all the orders of the doctors we befriend
although it's you whos gettin tossed inside the hospital again!
we got monumental bars, watch these prodigies ascend
coz gettin seen as average is not what we intend
knowledge for you cowards like, is it logical to sin?
when out amongst the stars is where our quality extends
astronomers are friends
so you should get that telescope they often recommend!
pardon me again, but losses aren't cool, our marksmen will avenge
any particles of pride you have swallowed with the gin

victorious till death, no documents of tragedy
success is proven when some dudes attempt copyin ur strategy
but the hate could bring us down, incompetance is gravity
yet it still can't knock our talent, it honestly comes naturally
dictators of the gifted 'cause democracy is savagery
the jealousy of generals has got armies comin after me
it's helping me dismember dudes, the suckers i would slap for dean
snipers aimed from everywhere, he's gotta watch my back ya see
viper fangs are very rare, no hollows when we clap the heat
an when we're at our prime, we're known to hinder teams
laughing at the lost souls of those who intervened
they had the balls to fuck with us so they were blown to smitherenes
fuckin all the tribes who think that stones and sticks are mean
we're wise owls who's noble brains are older than it seems
another day, another pillage dethroning sick regimes
copied patterns of the splattered blood and sewed em in our jeans
too smooth to commit rape but our poles will enter queens

You can't predict the don's, the analysts of conflict
Look at all the missions that the gangsta's have accomplished
In the past we've made mistakes, and we don't plan to live as convicts
We just stay hackin at ya chest
Whereas your grappling with death until your strangled on the carpet
Supply magic in the bars, but we ain't practicing the card tricks
We're like Jedi's to the minds of the savages we spar with
Leave em actin all retarded, scratchin at their armpits
Baffled and bemused at how we're batterin the artists
Victims of society are dragged in to this tar pit
coz every song recorded is...a renaissance of gorgeousness
Our only rule is to destroy, an we never stop enforcin' it
the cheddar got enormous, kid...we investing in the art
We're the first aid kit for rap incase it ever rips apart
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This was dope as fuck...seriously. Flow was off the chain (no pun intended)...only a couple flaws that i caught. The first and second verses had 15 lines...which really threw me off. The fourth verse had 17 lines...your rhymescheme at times threw me off...my fave bar was:
 you'll never find a weakness, our defence is impeccible
the tactics are superior, you're fencing with generals
^Ill...
Aside from the uneven lines and a couple lines that didnt rhyme wit the previous line, this was a really tight piece. All it needed was a few tweaks to make it great. Good shit yall
 
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word...i can never say i hate a verse/verses full of multis...u both did a great job...and comin from different sides, u did a good job matchin each other's style to make it seem like one person wrote it...some parts had messed up due to line count n all, but it was nonetheless hot...


an impossible event, we phenominal with strength
we're dominant as rappers and unstoppable as men
ignorin all the orders of the doctors we befriend
although it's you whos gettin tossed inside the hospital again!

^^^loved dat fuckin part...
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Pretty cool idea, not telling anyone who did what lines and this came out pretty dope..Some parts were sick, and multies were nice..Fatal already noted the mismatch in line count that messed it up a little tiny bit but it was still dope, keep droppin' and this was my fav. section/part:


"In the past we've made mistakes, and we don't plan to live as convicts
We just stay hackin at ya chest
Whereas your grappling with death until your strangled on the carpet
Supply magic in the bars, but we ain't practicing the card tricks
We're like Jedi's to the minds of the savages we spar with
Leave em actin all retarded, scratchin at their armpits
Baffled and bemused at how we're batterin the artists"
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I've NEVER Seen Anyone Complain About An Odd Amount Of Lines To A Verse Unless It's A Battle. W/e Tho, Thanks For The Feed Lol.
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odd amount of lines is cool, i never really understood that either, it still flows well....
 
This was really good man... me and kay did something like this going back and forwards a while back.... this was really nice
 
victorious till death, no documents of tragedy
success is proven when some dudes attempt copyin ur strategy
but the hate could bring us down, incompetance is gravity
yet it still can't knock our talent, it honestly comes naturally
 
 
only bar i felt tampered wit the flow a bit was this
 
In the past we've made mistakes, and we don't plan to live as convicts
We just stay hackin at ya chest
 
 
 
nice work ya'll
 
Ice they need time to translate it, That why U let kids down
So ya'll should go read my 08 shit, maybe U'll get it now
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That was a 3 line bar

In the past we've made mistakes, and we don't plan to live as convicts
We just stay hackin at ya chest
Whereas your grappling with death until your strangled on the carpet

But ye thanks, uppin
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this was a dope piece, I see the partnership went really well... but  pretty much it was stacked up with random ideas..   but enjoy reading it.. 1

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Originally posted by Point Blank Point Blank wrote:

I've NEVER Seen Anyone Complain About An Odd Amount Of Lines To A Verse Unless It's A Battle. W/e Tho, Thanks For The Feed Lol.
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Point, when have you EVER seen a verse that had an odd amount of lines? (expcept in noob or rameez verses)
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LMAO, I Dunno, I Don't Count
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I didnt count, either (at first) but it sounded off to me, and i was like wtf? Why does it sound uneven? So i counted...lol
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nice work guys. I've only read the first two verses so far (I'm busy right now :( ) but what i've read is hot..... keep it up






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Just seen a bot looking at this on active users and couldn't resist commenting

Can't believe this is over 5 years old, I miss the MSN cyphers
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This was a nice read, yeah. Excuse the upping...
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