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DressToKill 
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 Topic: Gimme The LootPosted: 12 July 2008 at 9:33pm |
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Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man
Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man
I Was The Head Hancho,And Partners With Shane
We'd Deal Daily,Feinds Paying Us To Harvest The Caine
We Were Ontop,Both Cliques Never Lacked Profits
Running New York With Dime Hoes And Fat Pockets
So I Packed Rockets,That Id Blow Off Of Your Chin
For Trying To Rob Me..But Shane?Id Never Thought It'd Be Him
We Got A Phone Call About 9:30,Got A Order For 7 Kilo's
From A Mexican Hustler Up In Harlem Named Timo
He Had A Bad Rep But I Never Thought Id Get Fucked
So Me And Shane's Boys Went And Jumped In The Truck
Headed Up Into Harlem And At 12:00 Pm We Met Him
To My Suprise They Pulled Gats..Told Me To Spread Em
They Stood High And Mighty Talking How If I Moved Id Be Dead Quick
They Left Sayin "Stay Out Of New York Or You'll Be Left Full Of Lead Bitch"
They Jetted Off In The Truck,And Thats All I Can Remeber
It Didnt Matter..I Called A Cab Back Home And Grabbed The Baretta
Called Some Hook Up's..Told Em This Shit Gonna Get Messy
6 Boys And Me Packing Arms We Knew It Was Gonna Get Heavy
Now Here I Sit In The Chevy Truck,With My Gat..I Cock It Back
In A Few Minutes..Im Gonna Earn All Of My Profits Back!
We Creep Around The Side..Scoping Out The Duplex
I See One Of Shanes Boys And Shoot Him Through The Chest
We Woke Up Rest Of Em,But Im Thinking About The Pay Roll
So I Duck Behind A Garbage Can And Bust Shots But Stay Low
In A Matter Of Minutes Were Near The Door Crawling
I Can See His Fortress Crumbling And Falling
We Gain Entrance Into The House I Tell My Boys Watch The Door
Im Creepin Inside Looking For Shane..Trying To Even The Score
He Jumps Out We Both Bust,Our Spirits Are Facing Death
He Catches Me In The Knee And I Penetrate His Neck
I Stumble Up In Pain..Look Over And Mumble "You Think You Can Fuck Me"?
I Stand Over His Shaking Body With The Gat..And Bust 3
Little Did I Know Timo Jetted For The Door And Tried To Escape
But My Boys Unloaded Clips And Fucked Him In The Chase
Got My Empire Back..Now I Hope You Understand
That If You Take My Loot..I Turn Into A Bad Bad Man
Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man
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Posted: 12 July 2008 at 10:43pm |
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Feelin' this.
Flowz fire, D... ill imagery and the plots thick, man. Had me feelin' that episode. Nah'm sayin? Yeah... syllable combos in you multies was tight. Sleek, Fam. Overall, some Hot flow and ill multies... Vocabs there... easy. Imagery, creativity, consistency, conveyances was tight also. This is hot Fam. Would sound dope on Audio... ............You got this joint Tracked? Holla'. Edited by Madeye - 12 July 2008 at 10:43pm |
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Posted: 12 July 2008 at 10:45pm |
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Nah I wish..just dropped it like a topical type ish..but thanks I had a few people say it would be good over audio..
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Posted: 13 July 2008 at 1:19am |
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There was definitely some parts in there that would sound dope on audio as anyone can tell reading this open mic out loud...Last three bars were tight and this part was my favorite as it just rolled along IMO...Really good open mic and i like the aggression of the story
We Got A Phone Call About 9:30,Got A Order For 7 Kilo's
From A Mexican Hustler Up In Harlem Named Timo
He Had A Bad Rep But I Never Thought Id Get Fucked
So Me And Shane's Boys Went And Jumped In The Truck
Headed Up Into Harlem And At 12:00 Pm We Met Him
To My Suprise They Pulled Gats..Told Me To Spread Em
They Stood High And Mighty Talking How If I Moved Id Be Dead Quick
They Left Sayin "Stay Out Of New York Or You'll Be Left Full Of Lead Bitch"
They Jetted Off In The Truck,And Thats All I Can Remeber
It Didnt Matter..I Called A Cab Back Home And Grabbed The Baretta
Called Some Hook Up's..Told Em This Shit Gonna Get Messy
6 Boys And Me Packing Arms We Knew It Was Gonna Get Heavy |
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Posted: 13 July 2008 at 1:41am |
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Thanks man..I really appreciate your feed
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Posted: 13 July 2008 at 4:39am |
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Definitely one of the nicer topical verses here. Imagery no doubt was there and flow was on point. Although your use of multis diminished towards the end, its no doubt a good drop.
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Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of...
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Posted: 13 July 2008 at 1:01pm |
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This was def a dope verse, D. Loved the story and the desciptiveness....you did a real good job of telling the story while still managing to make the verse rhyme well w/o it sounding forced. I was a little dissapointed with how it ended as far as the last two lines go, i woulda liked to see it wrapped up a little different. But still a great read tho....Def worthy of OMOTM considerations...props
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Posted: 13 July 2008 at 2:41pm |
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Thanks for the in depth feed guys..its really appreciated
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Posted: 14 July 2008 at 11:12pm |
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the story telling was clear...but the overall concept was too creative...i liked where you going with this, but ended it in a way that didn't really do any justice for the intensity of everything before it...but i can appreciate how you're working on your topical skills...the flow had a good balance...you didn't seem to force anything, and really stayed on topic throughout everything...good job...
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Posted: 15 July 2008 at 11:58am |
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not only dope but gimme the loot is my 2nd fav song from biggie.
well written piece, flow was consistant and what not, was simply enjoyable 2 read
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Posted: 16 July 2008 at 11:11am |
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Thanks..I love "Gimme the loot" too by Notorious
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