Open Mic: prophecy of a legacy (posted correctly)

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    Posted: 25 October 2013 at 11:13am
Its two fifteen xactly 
and i just cant sleep 
try to smoke some weed
to put my mind at ease 
but i still continue to think , like einstein
with all these thoughts runnin through my mind 
all i seem to think about is ways to improve
my unique style and technique  
constantly jotting my ideas down
even got a mini pen and paper pad
that i carry around 
this is the only way to express my thoughts acuratley
with out misconceptions 
or skewedd misdirected allegations 
shit, what did you just say bitch ?
ya thats my opinion, get over it 
im a bomb you dont wanna make me tick 
tick tick tick boom EXPLODE !
like an atomic bomb splitting its form 
for rap i was born , its in every step i take
god pre - meditated all these raps i make 
my spot in  this rap game is straight fate 
destiney in the form of perection 
my passion for this shit is infectious 
my lyrics pierce all theses readers minds
you are now infected 
garuntee imma be the best there ever is 
and the best there ever was 
mark my words , call this 
the realest shit you ever heard 
swear on my life 
or watch my grave burn 
be careful in position of opposition
soon it shall be my turn 
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Not the worst I've seen but no were near the best this ain't a diss read me out TAKE TIME with the words you rhyme and just as much on the concepts read it over n over and try and improve it till ur sure its the best it can be self hype belongs in the OM section but make sure u back ur hype with the things u write
Its clear u have a passion for writing the pen and pad line screams that out so give ur passion more time
Eg I sometimes will think of a subject then write down a number of opening bars then siv through the shit to get to the one that is best I do the same for the closing bar after I have spent some time on the middle ones
If noticed about my self and I have seen it in others too that u can write some shit down and think its on fire butthen some next man or gal will tthink it sucks its in our nature to self hype that's why this site is good because people tell u how it is so u can improve
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