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TURTLE
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Topic: TURTLE/TITU TOPICALPosted: 17 November 2013 at 1:42am |
![]() TURTLE I'm the brother of identical twins abused in the womb Our mother conceived on 10 cc's of which we consumened Crack cocaine from the first trimester of development With no worries.. i guess she thought it was irelevant My skull barely formened not knowing how to cry But the tears would usually flow out of my eyes Not knowing how or why, must be gods way of mercy Knowing if he took me than she could no longer hurt me 6 months along and I should've had fingers and toes Arms and legs only grew as far down as the knees and elbows Confused and delirious wondering if I feel right What do i know I was barely non existent in the blink of an eye I look at my brother thinking how could our mother make us suffer I think if i had the chance I would say I love her Unsatisfied hunger feeling like my stomachs is a plunger Feeding off of crack like toxins from a muffler No sound not even a whisper as I strain to whimper Thirsting for something other than hard liquor He never got a chance to see the sun shimmer I notice hes lifeless and dorment like hibernating bears on the first day of winter TITU stoned facial expressions- im blessed with evil recession, Though i never smoked but still facing fits of depression, Feeling the pounds of coke-wrote in the scrolls of fate, Dealing with coke my mother tokes to cloak some stains, Half grown brain cant take the vibes of stress filled strings, Lidless eyes dougin the sight of brother hopin to live, Self destructive and wild-i wish ya ever loved us, Wouldnt think ya sons as sins-embraced n hugged us, you're not hearing mum but we believe you're feeling ya seeds, These weak umbilical cords cant feed n meet our needs, You smoked dope n we hope it helped ya painfull strokes, Buh did ya know it inhibited our skeletal growth, Im satisfied by my fate but whats the fault of my brother?, Whose looking helplessly with eyes wide open like bubbles, Asking me things i dont know why we're growin' at slow pace, Please tell em yourself i cant bear his tearful face, Still I dont blame my motherhood for these drugs n spells, Cuz i can still hug my brother tight n celebrate hell, don't mean to be rude cuz we can name these "murders" a "bad luck" And thanks for turning this womb to the depths of grave for us, |
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K.Darko666
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 7:36am |
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I can dig it..some lines in both werent as pretty to read as others...but i can respect, definitly because i struggle with addiction, and see girls like this constantly, still slamming dope pregnant, nd turtle i see your from kansas city...idk if thats kansas or mizzou...but i was born n raised in topeka kansas, currently living in salina kansas now..didnt mean to get off subject...but seriously..dope pieces from both
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Brotha Goose
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 7:41am |
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Sorry fam Ive just been busy.....This was actually pretty dope,loved the concept behind it and the two of you came together real well. Turtle, you started this out real nice and set the tone, Titu you tied yur verse in and brought it home.....dope collab fellas
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Titu
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 8:56am |
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Appreciate yo feed,fellas.
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Manc
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 1:47pm |
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Feeling the pounds of coke-wrote in the scrolls of fate,
Dealing with coke my mother tokes to cloak some stains, ^^^^ that bit right there was nice as fuck T ![]() I look at my brother thinking how could our mother make us suffer I think if i had the chance I would say I love her ^^^^and Turtz - that was fire with the raw emotion feel to it that you roll off so well. This was dope lads. Really liked tyhe idea behind it and you both made it feel sad for the reader. At least for me anyway, being a parent and imagining how thi shit would feel for the kids involved was a great angle to take with a topical peice like this. Turtz, probly some of the best shit Ive seen you put down. Really reall impressed with your verse. And T - you know how I feel about your writing skills. Loved every bit of it. Really impressed with the both of you on this one. Nice one for the story too - its a different take on a subject that can only convey emotional messages.
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Titu
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 2:16pm |
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Thanks a lot for the extensive feed,manc. Really glad you enjoyed it. It always help in elevating and improving.
No doubt, turtle ripped this concept with his skills. Thanks bro |
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TURTLE
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 6:02pm |
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Thanks MANC. I appreciate ya checkin this out.
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 9:24pm |
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 9:27pm |
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Link with rameez? .
Thanks for the feed. Appreciate that! |
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TURTLE
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Posted: 17 November 2013 at 11:00pm |
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Thanks chain.
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Posted: 18 November 2013 at 5:46pm |
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I challenge Titu to a rap battle
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Titu
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Posted: 18 November 2013 at 5:57pm |
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^^^ up ya game first.
And stop spamming this thread. If you want it, make an official call out. << which i will reject "officially". |
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Titu
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Posted: 18 November 2013 at 6:00pm |
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^^ post aint visible.
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J504
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 12:17am |
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Wow, this was nice. Y'all did a good job all around on making this work well. There was some nice imagery throughout and y'all both did you thing. The concept was really dope and had some heart behind it. It's definitely subject matter many will feel, no doubt.
Only critique is it deserves a better title! Stay up fam. |
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 12:20am |
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Appreciate the feed J. Thanks man
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 12:26am |
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No prob T.
To specify on what I wrote about the title, "Brothers" is a cool title for the drop, you guys should call it that instead of "turtle titu topical" is what I meant. I think most people are drawn to proper titles when checking opens. |
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 12:29am |
Yeh man.. I got it.. Ill keep that in my mind.. Thanks - really glad you liked it. |
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 1:02am |
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Thanks J5 for checking this out.
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Posted: 19 November 2013 at 3:20pm |
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Posted: 23 November 2013 at 12:59pm |
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^^^ liking it so much
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