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Calibra
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Topic: Where Im FromPosted: 01 June 2009 at 11:23pm |
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Doomed by location... It's a hard life, hard days and hard nights
Enemies shake hands then next minute start fights Sold a dream, this wasn't promised to me Streets turned me to a man I never wanted to be Cause where im from, it's like im stuck here No luck, fucked, and drunk drinking Duff beer Felt enough fear to last me a life time No light shines on the victims of knife crime Home, should really look better in my eyes But this place owns my soul like the devil in disguise Destined for demise when I rarely see the sun Shot down in my prime and I've barely seen a gun How dare we seek some fun? No happieness achieved Paying out more money than we actually recieve But round here, we earn then we drink Earn then we drink, it's obserd when ya think Hoping all the money wasted would emerge from the sink Or the drain, try to change but then return to the drink Soon a pattern occurs and every day is the same We can't skip, just repeat, so we play it again Enough to make ya insane, yet I stay, I remain Cause a hard knock life circulates in my veins! |
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Junior Shade
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Posted: 01 June 2009 at 11:37pm |
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This is dope as fuck.. Serious..
I felt every line, can totally understand where your comin' from.. Great** visual effect to it, can relate to every bar.. Opening 2 bars where ill and the rest followed in its path.. Shit man, no hidden or subliminal messages just straight truth.. I'm not a huge Open Mic fan, hense why you hardly see me in here but this was awesome.. Straight illin'... Edited by Junior Shade - 01 June 2009 at 11:44pm |
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Kay B
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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 12:00am |
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Dope....period
As jnr said every line was felt and had its place in the piece, i think the duff beer line was kinda forced since im sure geordies dont have duff beer haha, dope visual effect as said, being able to relate to this made it better and i could feel it as i was reading....dope shit man |
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sparta
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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 12:22am |
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Yeah, pretty much the above, this is fantastic, keep dropping
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CHAIN
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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 1:09pm |
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Destined for demise when I rarely see the sun
Shot down in my prime and I've barely seen a gun How dare we seek some fun? No happieness achieved Paying out more money than we actually recieve But round here, we earn then we drink Earn then we drink, it's obserd when ya think def poetry jam ....yup! |
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J BaKe 330
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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 2:44pm |
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Yo Im Diggin This Verse Bro,I Can Relate To Almost Everything U Said ...U Need To Put This Down On Audio 4 Sure....Get @ Mine
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Posted: 02 June 2009 at 9:03pm |
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An all this happens in Newcastle :P
Lol,jk, hot man, you dont need to be told... keep it up
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Exoduzt
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Posted: 04 June 2009 at 1:56am |
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damn...this is just dope...the emotion this portrays is incredible....i lost the flow in only one part but other than that this is flawless...the ending was just crazy...
great read
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Cuba
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Posted: 04 June 2009 at 3:49pm |
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Dope verse, rhyming mixed with content & imagery sprinkled in there...vivid descriptions
Yeah...sick
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rapdisup
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Posted: 04 June 2009 at 4:14pm |
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no1 above me has lied this is hot shit right here dude i aint gotta say more bout this jus read tha verse peps!
Peace
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The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'!
It aint over till I Rapdisup |
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