Open Mic: Pardon Me, Eulogist
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    Posted: 01 January 2014 at 8:27pm



The flyest at the wake;
The ways of the exquisite
Shape up crispy
My waves were too Pacific  
I waved at the widow
My wavy-ness was wicked
I waited by the window
Where I wavered over business…
Decisions, decisions
I’m wasting my expenses
On liquor ‘cause getting…  
Wasted’s so expensive
Both of my cufflinks
Weighed ‘bout 2 syringes
I put my cup down
‘cause her waist was too terrific
I’m Wade with the Heat
My shine never waned
Back in the day
When them wages were offensive
Waivers were submitted
Fuck the wafers with the milk
This shit is ridic’
Like the Wayans with their films
Fuck the wailing and the grieving  
‘Give wang to these MILFS’
I’m tryna do numbers
Like Wayne and Meek Mill
Winking at these women  
I will prolly meet again
When they sons get killed
R.I.P to them.



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I liked this. Short but sweet. 

Some of the flow was great, and I like how you used similar sounds and intonations to mix words together and keep that shit smooth as physically possible. 

I waved at the widow 
My wavy-ness was wicked 
I waited by the window 
Where I wavered over business…
Decisions, decisions 

^For example. 

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this was some sick shit.  loved the short bar flow.  rhymes were good and some decent wordplay.  nice drop brah
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Listen'n to Take it to the head by Dj Khaled.... . Flow was perfect spit yur whole writ with no stumbles
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this was hot bro.......................loved how this played out like an entertaining movie idea
with such short lines thats some serious skills
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i can't help but read this like an old bust rhymes style quick with lots of emphasis on syllables… makes me wish you wrote more… good shit chain..
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Not one of your best. ;) lol
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Someone said it above. I already forgot cause I skimmed through feedback but it was like a movie idea. It's pretty remarkable when you can read and visualize very clearly and precisely and that's because of the way you use your words and imagery. Kept it short and simple but always enjoyable and interesting. How'd you come up with the concept? Do tell. Ill stuff, man.
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Originally posted by Freeda5thDawg Freeda5thDawg wrote:

Someone said it above. I already forgot cause I skimmed through feedback but it was like a movie idea. It's pretty remarkable when you can read and visualize very clearly and precisely and that's because of the way you use your words and imagery. Kept it short and simple but always enjoyable and interesting. How'd you come up with the concept? Do tell. Ill stuff, man.


lol

Well, I was at this wake, and I was looking like money, If I may say so myself.
The women there were looking like 'woooo!'..black dresses were super tight. 
So I just looked up to the sky and in my head I said to my man 'I KNOW you're not mad cause if you was here u'd be doing the same shit'. He wouldn't have it any other way.

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This was mental. To tie in that much alliteration and assonance in short bars while still getting a message across is ridiculously difficult and you make it seem effortless. I found the flow to this one much easier to follow than in your Orion collab because this one was a lot more formulaic I guess. Pleasure as always
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Short but Dope as fuck.

Your flow stayed hot throughout. Good executions and dope concepts.
Very effective piece! Lots of props


Edit: wanted to quote these.

Waivers were submitted
Fuck the wafers with the milk
This shit is ridic’
Like the Wayans with their films
Fuck the wailing and the grieving  
‘Give wang to these MILFS’
I’m tryna do numbers
Like Wayne and Meek Mill
Winking at these women  
I will prolly meet again
When they sons get killed
R.I.P to them.

Edited by Titu - 03 January 2014 at 12:20am
Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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