Text Battle Archive: Se�or Perfecto vs Lawless...

Rules: 20 lines; no time limit; first to 5 votes or 3-0 KO; all votes count but anyone using voting categories is gay...

Extra Rule:  No making up words like "analitication"... but stringing random words together in an incorrect form to force multis will be tolerated...

Adios...

Yo, Yo...

You ain't Lawless...  You're clueless...  I knew you couldn't do this,
ELITE have been distressing since they put this kid on their crewlist,
Find them all replying to buy him time after my spit,
I'm implying this guy relies on dickriders and I don't like it,
You type alike from site to site but I'm here to fight the hype,
Whether you write or bite tonight I know you'll reply with some kinda tripe,
Remind your mind to refine your rhymes cos mine will blind your eyes,
And remember to annotate your post so voters can find your lies,
If this guy tries to defy the site again then witness his demise,
If he keeps sticking his nose in other peoples' businesses he dies,
You belie Hip-Hop so watch this kid flop,
Mods asked you to stop talking shit... you did not,
You're mistaken if you reckon you'll be making a quick drop,
You'll be facing a worst fate than William Kidd* got,
You act like a big-shot with forced multi-syllable rhymes,
Bring back the beef with ELITE cos I usually kill a bull twice,
There... take note... I know you're scared of hate votes,
I berate those who post their flows in bold and fake quotes,
They call me Perfecto cos I sound and look flawless,
I don't need 20 lines...  Two words will do:  Fuck Lawless!

Adios...

I'm feelin' mathematical... I'ma rate each bar and decide that way...

Senor... Nice verse... some of it didn't hit hard enough... a lot of it was scorin' well purely because of its lyricism, though you did keep punches goin' they weren't as harsh as they could have been, though line eight and the whole finisher was mad... pushed the rating up a bit... Nice multis, technically varied with transitionals and internals, animates the verse well, a bit of metaphor too, liked it... 8.1

Lawless... Was tight... expectin' better though... This isn't hate, you know that. The wordplay was clever but not all of it was helpin' to really hit him... like the sweater and credit card bits for example... though the wordplay was funny and clever... flowed nice but not quite as nice as Perfecto's. Multis were OK... you didn't force them which is good, and there weren't (m)any broken... but the verse lacked the drive that Perfecto's multis gave him... 7.9

Overall... you both, for me, didn't centre this battle on punches. You centred it on multis and wordplay respectively and both fell short of the potential this battle had. I can tell you both rushed a bit which is probably reason for the drop in standard, but at the end of it Senor had a tight(er) closer and his verse had more drive and flow for me, which helped accentuate the level at which his punches hit - because the punches between you were average overall, but inseparable - so this battle had to be decided on other attributes. Law, if your wordplay had been a little harsher/punch-based, you'd have taken this.

VOTE: Senor Perfecto

Firstly, Lawless, learn how to press shift + enter man

Senor

Enjoyed your verse like mad, multis used so well throughtout, flowed really good the whole time. Personals were good, sum of em hit really well. u just made it all work well their, structured out well 2. Only thing u could of dun is more wordplay, but i can see that u didnt need it in this 1 cos what u had in their was well good

Lawless

Not a bad verse from u, hard to read cos it was so spaced out so u couldnt get a feel for it n gain a grip on what u was tryin to say. I got sum of it well, had sum good use of wordplay in their, but sum were lame, the credit card 1 i werent feelin, plus sum of the wordplay werent really hittin him, duno how closin speech marks is meant to get at sum1 (not sayin ur verse was bad just explainin what i saw). But sum of it was cool, hope 2 c more of ya.

Vote

Has to be Senor, he had the better all round verse,multi's made it sick as hell, got in2 it well and just thought it was alot more enjoyable.

VOTE:SENOR

Lawless... Very nice verse. You had some complexity and a nice structure. Rhyme sheme was pretty tight and I liked tha flow. Good stuff... 8/10

Se�or Perfecto... VERY nice verse! Some pretty tight multiez and complexity was aight. Flow was hard-comin, and I liked your structure as well. You came hardest in rhyme scheme and flow. Very nice job - 9.5/10

Vote~ Se�or Perfecto.

~1~

 

I had no idea how much you loved this naming-and-shaming shit...

If I'd known sooner I would have taken more time with it and not done a rushed ten minute keystyle...

Adios...