Open Mic: My Downfall

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    Posted: 29 August 2008 at 7:17am
What Is It To Die?For I Am Not Afraid Of Death
I Have No Lover Anymore..No Familly..Nothing Courageous Left
The Hand Ive Been Delt Is Cold..Like Feeling Of A Strong Barrel
I Stare At Picture Frames..Saying All Of My Long Farwell's
The Feeling Of Emptiness..Can Capture A Mans Desire
To Strive Through Strife..And Demand Something Higher
No More Self Determination..No Reason To Even Get Through
No Mother Or Father To Turn To..No Aunts No Neice No Nephew
To Be Left With Nothing..Is To Die Inside Itself
Loneliness Is A Trigger..To A Man With No Provided Help
You Ask Me How I Know This? Well Ive Seen The Tops And Bottoms
The Great Memories Of Times..And Others That Should Be Forgotten
Feeling On Top Of The World,Is A Man's Worst Possesion
Cuz Everything That Goes Up..Must Go Fall Into Depression
Ive Had It With Owning Nothing,In A Self Obssesed Enviorment
Now I Shall Exchage My Life..For An Eternal Life Of Retirement

"Boom"..."Shell Falls"
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Read this on the other site and fed it on msn but ill do it on here since every other fucker is lazy, as i said before content and emotion in this is dope definetly a step up from previous things you've dropped becoming consistantly impressive though which is a great thing, flow was on point, wasn't the greatest vocab but it didn't need it to have the effect it did...dope drop
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Thanks Kay..was kind a return peice :)
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Your mean your gonna stick around this time?













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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Bolo Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 August 2008 at 2:19am
"cuz everything that goes up...must go fall into depression"
that was pretty dope... a few other lines stood out too...as a whole, this was pretty good...flowed well, original wording (for admittedly played concepts), and tight emotion...u've evolved duke, keep doin u
I am the one that knocks...
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