Open Mic: Where Im From

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    Posted: 01 June 2009 at 11:23pm

Doomed by location...

It's a hard life, hard days and hard nights
Enemies shake hands then next minute start fights
Sold a dream, this wasn't promised to me
Streets turned me to a man I never wanted to be
Cause where im from, it's like im stuck here
No luck, fucked, and drunk drinking Duff beer
Felt enough fear to last me a life time
No light shines on the victims of knife crime
Home, should really look better in my eyes
But this place owns my soul like the devil in disguise
Destined for demise when I rarely see the sun
Shot down in my prime and I've barely seen a gun
How dare we seek some fun? No happieness achieved
Paying out more money than we actually recieve
But round here, we earn then we drink
Earn then we drink, it's obserd when ya think
Hoping all the money wasted would emerge from the sink
Or the drain, try to change but then return to the drink
Soon a pattern occurs and every day is the same
We can't skip, just repeat, so we play it again
Enough to make ya insane, yet I stay, I remain
Cause a hard knock life circulates in my veins!
 
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This is dope as fuck.. Serious..

I felt every line, can totally understand where your comin' from.. Great** visual effect to it, can relate to every bar.. Opening 2 bars where ill and the rest followed in its path..

Shit man, no hidden or subliminal messages just straight truth..

I'm not a huge Open Mic fan, hense why you hardly see me in here but this was awesome..


Straight illin'...


Edited by Junior Shade - 01 June 2009 at 11:44pm
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Kay B Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 02 June 2009 at 12:00am
Dope....period

As jnr said every line was felt and had its place in the piece, i think the duff beer line was kinda forced since im sure geordies dont have duff beer haha, dope visual effect as said, being able to relate to this made it better and i could feel it as i was reading....dope shit man
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Yeah, pretty much the above, this is fantastic, keep dropping
Не все потеряно пока...
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Destined for demise when I rarely see the sun
Shot down in my prime and I've barely seen a gun
How dare we seek some fun? No happieness achieved
Paying out more money than we actually recieve
But round here, we earn then we drink
Earn then we drink, it's obserd when ya think

def poetry jam ....yup!
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Yo Im Diggin This Verse Bro,I Can Relate To Almost Everything U Said ...U Need To Put This Down On Audio 4 Sure....Get @ Mine
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An all this happens in Newcastle :P
Lol,jk, hot man, you dont need to be told... keep it up
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Exoduzt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 04 June 2009 at 1:56am
damn...this is just dope...the emotion this portrays is incredible....i lost the flow in only one part  but other than that this is flawless...the ending was just crazy...

great read

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Dope verse, rhyming mixed with content & imagery sprinkled in there...vivid descriptions

Yeah...sick
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no1 above me has lied this is hot shit right here dude i aint gotta say more bout this jus read tha verse peps!
 
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