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J Sass
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Topic: Off My ChestPosted: 16 February 2010 at 12:19pm |
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fuck my Pops thats smokes Rock, and my moms that Smokes Bomb(bud) and yall might say that this dosent flow on Text
Edited by J Sass - 16 February 2010 at 12:21pm |
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Alcatraz
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Posted: 16 February 2010 at 3:24pm |
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nice drop regardless
i mean, Noobs get mad when yall callin em Noobs
and tha, Mods get mad when yall callin em Fools and tha, Vets just Laugh cuz most have been in their Shoes and i bet, Scotty gets Mad when yall give em tha News loled at this
i never said i was tha most Lyrical nor will i ever Try to Be
cuz when i stop sayin what i feel just to throw Multies thats when i would Lie to ME!!! but yall gone start seenin Alotta me, like that bold guy with tha Mustache on Monopoly nice
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King Jehu
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Posted: 16 February 2010 at 7:38pm |
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Very honest, very true and very well said. The message is more important than the rhymes and the flow. The rhymes were fine, the lines were way long on some parts, but nothing had awkward phrasing or overt errors (aside from bold rather than bald). Good job J.
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Insert something rappy here
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J Sass
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Posted: 16 February 2010 at 8:14pm |
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good lookin for tha feed yall .....i think sum lines are Stretched too(sumthin i dont do Often)
and i didnt catch that Typo KJ, but good lookin out..
Sass
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Posted: 16 February 2010 at 11:00pm |
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you definitely got something off your chest via this drop man...peace
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Sick-Witted->means
I'm clever an ill & my best is revealed when Da pressure is buildin, so step if ya willin But testin da realest Will only lead u down a lonely street 2 ya death cuz I kill it |
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Posted: 16 February 2010 at 11:46pm |
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i like this sass. these are my fav songs right here. that real life stuff. I gotta couple myself. but these are the type lyrics that you b like "fuck if anyone else feels it" because they will have to b/c u feel it cause it comes from ya heart. I personally liked the whole thing. you want the lyrics to keep you interested all the way thru and that's what these did
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U already know...
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Calibra
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Posted: 17 February 2010 at 7:05pm |
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Very good stuff Sass, really impressed with the progression. Much like my Russian Roulette pt. 2 open I think you had something you really wanted to say and rather than sacrifice content for flow you sacrificed flow for content, which in my opinion is always the way to go. Wasn't sure how to take the name drop at first but I know you ain't mean anything bad sayin' you don't fucks with me so that's cool.
"cuz when i stop sayin what i feel just to throw Multies thats when i would Lie to ME!!!" Easily my favourite line. Keep it up dude. |
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J Sass
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Posted: 22 February 2010 at 6:44am |
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good lookin for tha feed yall....and Cali, when i said that it was more on sum i dont fuck wit yall to tha Extent to where we on sum MSN type shyt or Collabin....but i still hit yall up and yall didnt Bullshyt me....cuz yall really couldve....but yall didnt and it just showed how real yall were....Senor too...i just forgot to mention him....
but good lookin for tha Feed yall
Sass
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Kiki Spirez
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Posted: 23 February 2010 at 3:42am |
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I like pieces that feel like rants, you know that someones felt better through writing it, and it's nice to see rhymin' help someone. Some true shit here.
and my Cuzzin tried to help, but really his Design
was for me to get off on trackz, and Sky Rocket through his Prime Highlight for me, liked the wordin'..
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CHAIN
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Posted: 25 February 2010 at 10:23pm |
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then everybody says Lyricists Inc is tha Wackest Crew
why? cuz we more Active than You, or Actually Rap what we Do? that's what's up, u need to do a part 2 to this one |
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Posted: 27 February 2010 at 8:46pm |
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Well done Sass...this was one of your better pieces.
then everybody says Lyricists Inc is tha Wackest Crew
why? cuz we more Active than You, or Actually Rap what we Do? Truth!!!!
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Posted: 28 February 2010 at 12:23am |
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Some real shit there.. dont remember seein this, had some real solid lines in there. You need to vent more often so you drop more.
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Posted: 01 March 2010 at 2:00am |
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It was an interestin' read the whole way through cause I wanted to see what the next problem would be in the next line... So you did ya job... Good way of venting, good rhyming. Some of the line lengths lookded extended, but it flowed to me, and alot of the shit in it was true... Overall, a good address to how you feel. Keep shit real. Ha.
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