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1...put the heat to ya dome...like hot domes, yo
2... make this chicken run....like animal olympics
3..... leave a cat with no head....like a French Guillotine
4..... leave this guy black and blue...like black and blue bodypaint, yo
5.... have this cat strugglin to breathe...like he was extremely obese, and this was causing an obstruction to his windpipe...man
6.... this guy felt more hands...than velcro glove manufacturers
7.... this guy spend more time on his back... than inexplicably inversed clock faces
8.... this guy been beaten on the job....like simultaneous masturbation and felatio
 
GENETICALLY MODIFIED SICKNESS SON...DOLLA BACK
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Man, y'all is type whack...like being overly agressive with keyboards
 
YOU CAN'T FUCK WITH THIS...VIRGIN WORDPLAY SON, VAGINA RAPS SON...AINT NO PUSSY'S FUCKING WITH THIS
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7.... this guy spend more time on his back... than inexplicably inversed clock faces
 
 
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no one answerd my question
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They were wack.
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oh
wat do i need to change or fix
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Originally posted by 9MM 9MM wrote:

ill blast a clip in a bitch, i aint scared to kill a nigga
leave ya body bloody and holly like a church with no preacher
 
For this I'd start with cutting out the gun talk. Also it's spelt Holy. And for me this didn't even rhyme, that generally doesn't work in your favour.
 
Originally posted by 9MM 9MM wrote:

they call u 9mm but u cant pull no clips
ill fuck u up nine times so nine aint shit
 
This is weak, no punch at all. It has no sting. If someone said that to you in a battle would you be like "Ohhh shit! He got me there!"? Work on dissing yourself in private though as it will help with creating your punchlines. Check some of the tutorials around the site too.
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I got u Quba

1...put the heat to ya dome... Like rubbing alcohol on a freshly shaved head
2... make this chicken run... Like colonel sanders is chasing it
3..... leave a cat with no head... Like Perfecto making dinner
4..... leave this guy black and blue... Like you tried to change your luck by painting a black cat blue
5.... have this cat strugglin to breathe... Like Tom chasing Jerry all day
6.... this guy felt more hands... than politicians meeting people on the campaign trail
7.... this guy spend more time on his back... than dead people
8.... this guy been beaten on the job... like being last to cum in gay 69
Insert something rappy here
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No homo @ No. 8
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Originally posted by King Jehu King Jehu wrote:

I got u Quba

1...put the heat to ya dome... Like rubbing alcohol on a freshly shaved head
2... make this chicken run... Like colonel sanders is chasing it
3..... leave a cat with no head... Like Perfecto making dinner
4..... leave this guy black and blue... Like you tried to change your luck by painting a black cat blue
5.... have this cat strugglin to breathe... Like Tom chasing Jerry all day
6.... this guy felt more hands... than politicians meeting people on the campaign trail
7.... this guy spend more time on his back... than dead people
8.... this guy been beaten on the job... like being last to cum in gay 69
 
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Ok...
 
1...put the heat to ya dome... Like arsonists in the O2 arena
2... make this chicken run... Like a low budget clay animation film 
3..... leave a cat with no head... Like an angry cannibal with pet alergies
4..... leave this guy black and blue... Like a fading night sky
5.... have this cat strugglin to breathe... Like Biggie everytime he spoke
6.... this guy felt more hands... Than a champion arm wrestler 
7.... this guy spend more time on his back... Than his masseuse 
8.... this guy been beaten on the job... Like everyone Brock Lesnar fights
 
 
Yeah son!
 


Edited by Calibra - 01 December 2008 at 4:40pm
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1....put the heat to ya dome...like fellatio from a hot woman
2....make this chicken run...like i was producing a 2000 animated flick
3....leave a cat with no head...like he married a mormon girl
4....leave this guy black and blue...like he was banging paint-covered drums as a member of the well-known blueman group
5....have this cat struggling to breathe...like he was wrestling a much stronger person while a 2004 Fabolous track played in the background
6....this guy felt more hands...than a penny
7....this guy spend more time on his back...than the second swimmers on medley relay teams
8....this guy been beaten on the job...like jesus
I am the one that knocks...
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I'm sorry sirs, there's some genius showing through your stupid punchlines
Insert something rappy here
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Did anybody get my outrageous pun on the French guillotine one....aristocrats/cats
 
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I don't honestly know where to start...
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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With..."put the heat to your dome"
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lmao@ "tutorial" and lmao@ these "punchlines"
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lmao@ you thinking that people are doing this from a serious standpoint
fuckin tool
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Originally posted by SwordedStylez SwordedStylez wrote:

fuckin tool

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8....this guy been beaten on the job...like hatton vs mayweather

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