Open Mic: Starvin Artist ft. KayB
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    Posted: 20 February 2010 at 10:59pm

You ever met a starvin artist?
so far its hardest to keep the food on the plate
I've got No options, all i can do is just wait
But I'm screwin wit fate, hopin the game'll love me
feelin deceived by God like a preacher came and touched me
but it aint enough, see Ive got a son I'm responsible for
The world's got me feelin defeated like I was sponsoring Gore
Im stompin the floor tryin to find gold, but It's not my time though
its like I'm blind So I cant even see the message my mind's told
its like times slow nothing's barely movin around me
I'm trapped in a place and the Devil's choosin the boundaries
The Liquor aint a solution but i abuse it to calm me
I always brought in the money, Now All I can do is the laundry!!
But I stay writin wit the intentions somebody may like em
and get me out from under this storm and the same lightnin
Todays frightning its just pitch black like the stars departed
Try to push our bars the farthest cuz its too hard as a Starvin Artist

 
You ever met a starvin artist?
so far its hardest just to keep the bills paid
spit these in real ways but payment on the heat is still late
please conceal hate and give us a chance to overcome the odds
we cant keep our kids fed in the winter wit only summer jobs
I got a passion for spittin, I'm designed to be a rapper man
devisin a master plan, So I dont see my guys bein a back up band
layin off workers, What are we prayin for?
Ask for some sunshine but everyday it pours
Some cats spit wack shit, and they made it to gold
I aint takin that road cuz I aint gonna trade in my soul
Any life brings struggles and plenty fights
I'm stressed here so I've shed tears many nights
when I die I wanna be a figure my son'll be proud of
How does a soul survive in this cold world without love
The rap games full of killers though and my hearts the target
Tryin to be a stars the hardest when your stuck as a Starvin Artist
 

You ever met a starvin artist?
This how id class it, struggles a more suitable word
Wearing a vest in the hood, wantin' a suit in the 'burbs
Using my phone as a mic, blue toothing recordings
Desperate to prove that im dope, this a suitable warning
We'd shoot in the mornings, an' robs shit in the night
Never saw peoples pain, jus a platinum disk was in sight
Selling all i could to earn to money for studio time
Knowing deep down without success im losin' my mind
Droppin' random disses abusin who shines
Ignoring others advice, fuck em the conclusion was mine
Criticising my style yet not realising the truth
You come from my world, my actions a' coinciding with you
Ima keep strugglin' till my son has a room
So keep smilin' i dont give a fuck if it's funny to you
Cause im time best believe ima be carving past this
And in a few months time...you won't see a starving artist
 
 
 


Edited by Stalin - 20 February 2010 at 10:59pm
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About damn time haha...nice verse's
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I like it. Well written and stay focused on topic all the way thru. Nothing seemed forced and all thoughts connected. Everybody on the site has to feel this. I think we're all starvin artist or we wouldnt be up here lol.... So the old mods got some lyrics lol that's whats up... be easyClap
U already know...
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Form: WLWWWL 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote King Jehu Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 21 February 2010 at 3:41am
Awesome shit. I'm sorry I haven't been able to finish writing to this. I did 16 bars but I figured it wouldn't be enough to I was waiting to see if something else popped in my mind.
I like the concept and the execution. I hope you don't mind me posting my verse someday.
Insert something rappy here
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No prob J.. I sent a pm but u never answered so I just figured u were too busy.. would love to see the verse.
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Form: LNWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 21 February 2010 at 7:07pm
I forgot thanks for the feed J & Snooz.  More feed please
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First verse was the dopest.
Second was cool
Third kinda fell off for me in terms of rhymes and flow...

But you stuck to the topic very well, and you never trailed off. It's very consistent and on point and that's something to be proud of.

The topic is cool, lyrically it reminds me of some living legends stuff.
Keep on collaborating, you guys do well together.
PEEACE
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^ I actaully read through my verse and i found LOADS of faults with flow ect, i hadnt read it since sending it to stalin like 2 months ago lol

Props on the feeed
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the first two were the tightest, but all three verses were dope..and worked well as a whole... peace
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I'm clever an ill & my best is revealed when

Da pressure is buildin, so step if ya willin

But testin da realest

Will only lead u down a lonely street 2 ya death cuz I kill it
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agree wit sick the first two were the best but overall all 3 were gud.
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please conceal hate and give us a chance to overcome the odds
we cant keep our kids fed in the winter wit only summer jobs

that line really stood out to me 
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Some of the best writing i've seen in awhile... keep up
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Enjoyable read, I like tha way it was structured. With tha feelin' of copin'.  Well done
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Originally posted by Matt The Ripper Matt The Ripper wrote:

Some of the best writing i've seen in awhile... keep up


Thanks man, i was kinda annoyed stalin let the side down though but its cool my uber dopeness kept his up Smile
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Form: LNWWLW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 February 2010 at 11:47pm
lol funny guy..
 
sit down before I smack that mic out your avatars hand LOL
 
thanks for the feed everyone.. any more is appreciated.
 
 
 
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Form: WWWWWL 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote I-kontinue Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 01 March 2010 at 1:34am
I like the concept. Very good collab, good choice of pickin' Kay to collab with... Shit complimented each other. I felt Stalin's first verse was better than his 2nd... Just some slicker ideas to me, A couple quoteables in each, like the preacher line, and the "around me" rhyme all the way to the "laundry" rhyme just flowed effortlessly... The second verses standouts were the summer jobs and "everyday it pours" lines... and Kay did his usually good writing on a given topic... You could see the different style... Seemed more straightforward and specific as in telling a story while Stalin's seemed more general... Both good angles at it... Peace
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