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Kay B 
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 Topic: Choices ft woodsPosted: 09 June 2008 at 4:18pm |
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Which choice will he make? *Sean sits back and imagines what his life will be like if he make certain choices* Lives full of fights, followed by tragical drive by's at night Laughed and joked as ironically he decides to die for his life ... Countless extensive overreactions from swallowin' pills Beaten daily to make him tough by 'family', yet followed em still In his mothers eye's an angel, yet owned a satanic reflection Spent everyday of his life, snorting lines and planning injections Robbin' stores and pensioners for the penny's in purses Shoot up a dose of heroin, hits the streets again as he searches With a friend as its purchased in the nights he's moving dope Livid life on the streets, repeating famous movie quotes You'd assume he's broke, staring at rough n ragged wear Moved to bridges taggin' there, greasy slicked back crabby hair Went wrong on one night, soon a deal was destined to bust Knew his friends as his family, and the rest he would trust He knew by standing by someone wants him when wanting his friends As predicted in his the back of his mind, someone wanted revenge Stood alone on the corner awaiting buyers to purchase A car sped past and bullets were fired...Sean lays in pain alive on the surface Blood pouring from wounds bullets had tore on his chest Repeating in his mind, "im a dying solider, this is war at it's best" Staring at a fading picture, a bullet wound he clutches n holds Ya see reaching his toes, was the closest he come to touching his soul Deciding against this choice of money no decision was left Could he possibly take a route that created a vision of death? ... Lives full of fights, followed by tragical drive by's at night Laughed and joked as ironically... he'd decide to die for his life Yup...switch it up woods Soul been opened in two, but im hoping that new chances arise cause the dance I despise has left me broken and blue A gun life, with fun fights had been callin me’ its frighten’n But one night, some guy should have seen that all I need’s enlightn’n A teacher to preach of the ways to do the right thing but I had already seen the world of evil that only the devil’s side brings Seen the hustlers at work, sling’in, the murder n’ the violence ’Momma tried to stop me ridin’, she knew the hurt that pain n’ lies did Sat me down, jus’ us around, n’ said, “first id learn what pride is” That, its in better education, not ho’s n’ gun’s n’ diamonds So thought’s of bein’ lifeless, I decided to do the turn around avoidin’ the life where hurt resounds, n’ tried to get the learnin’ down So for the Life I Desired, Hard work was required, so I put in the time’ n’ struggle stop thinkin’ bein’ alive was nothin’, stayed away from all the crime n’ trouble what “brother’s” say isn’t gonna stay, my mind was resigned to the pure n’ just Someone decide to care, the first, a concillour who’s there to be curing us learned to fend for myself, gained wealth from an emotional emancipation Happiness, no saddened faces, when I finally walked up for my graduation Mom had tears of joy, ‘couldn’t believe it when I saw her face’ Seen it wasn’t all a waste, Felt Pride the likes, I could never replace Started visitin’ a church, learnin the higher path of the righteous So if I ever felt the devil’s impulses, id know I’d learn how to fight this Had the commandments recited, saw the gangster’s and felt above em’ all cause the pain of hell was nothin’ when compared with the warmth n’ the love of god The only thing that scares me now, is the thought of havin’ my faith deployed cause the pleasure is un-measurable, knowin’ im my mum’s greatest joy |
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Rameez
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Posted: 09 June 2008 at 4:33pm |
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kay.. nice spit.. flow was good and easy to read you kept it simple and clear throughout thats the thing I liked.. good way of starting and tragic ending... and good way of relating to the title.
Wood.. good read.. nice story this was emotional from the start.. shows clearly how a man changes his choice through the reflection of her mother.. good start and ending.. I like closer good way of ending.. keep spiting, u doing great! EZ |
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Kay B
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Posted: 09 June 2008 at 5:56pm |
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Props, thanks
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Posted: 09 June 2008 at 6:00pm |
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This was dope...was feelin both verses...great read yall...
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Posted: 09 June 2008 at 7:16pm |
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Very good storyline toward both tales, I felt the imagery and movement throughout the scripts. Hopefully Ya'll will see some of my tales of misery around the boards to relate.
Good job, Props~
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~Idled~
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Posted: 09 June 2008 at 7:21pm |
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Its cool to see you both collabing..like everyone said both were good I enjoyed the read
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The original comeback kid
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Kay B
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Posted: 10 June 2008 at 9:54am |
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Props, thanks dress
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Posted: 10 June 2008 at 6:31pm |
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both stories were great to read...and i can always appreciate it in lyrical form...but k's is what i enjoyed more because i was able to flow with it much easier...i was able to get a certain rhythm and read through while understandin the story...and you already know that i think your story telling skill is easily the best IMO here...woods' part was great too...and though the multis were there, there were alot of straight lines which kinda threw off the flow for me....nonethelss, the content was creative...both approached the concept very well and told each's part different, yet clearly and lyrically...nice collab...
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Kay B
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Posted: 10 June 2008 at 6:42pm |
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Props, thanks free i'll pass your comments onto woods
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Posted: 10 June 2008 at 7:13pm |
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both were pretty dope actually....
it was a cool story, tho i felt K had the better sounding verse.. i was able tp read it more smoothly opposed to Wood's's. not sayig wood's's was at all bad, enjoyed the creativity and relatableness.. but K's storyline was just more vivid and interesting to me |
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Kay B
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Posted: 11 June 2008 at 2:46pm |
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Thanks
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Kay B
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Posted: 11 June 2008 at 7:12pm |
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Damn, i gotta stop makin this shit so comfortable
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Kay B
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Posted: 21 June 2008 at 10:50am |
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Time to wake up yet? |
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Posted: 21 June 2008 at 8:07pm |
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to the 2nd page aint bad... lol
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Posted: 21 June 2008 at 11:00pm |
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haha
In his mothers eye's an angel, yet owned a satanic reflection Spent everyday of his life, snorting lines and planning injections Robbin' stores and pensioners for the penny's in purses Shoot up a dose of heroin, hits the streets again as he searches With a friend as its purchased in the nights he's moving dope Livid life on the streets, repeating famous movie quotes Flow was on point and the story just moved along so nicely..Nice rhymes and story and it really helped that it just sped along with me...I don't know what you did but this part especially flows great for me and it made your verse an enjoyable read Woods- You too had some extra rhymes in there and you usually just focus on the story(which i do) and slack on the rhymes putting them 2nd behind the story..Beginning part went very smoothly along but you had a couple stumbles in the middle or at least the way i read it but then you picked it up strongly again and those last 4 lines were tight, nice story too, good shit and nice collab between you two...When you two combine it always creates something unique since you both have your own little ways of spicing up a story or situation.. Had the commandments recited, saw the gangster’s and felt above em’ all cause the pain of hell was nothin’ when compared with the warmth n’ the love of god The only thing that scares me now, is the thought of havin’ my faith deployed cause the pleasure is un-measurable, knowin’ im my mum’s greatest joy |
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Posted: 22 June 2008 at 2:26pm |
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Props, thanks U
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